This is my cut where I have changed the saturation to be lower, creating a more washed out look. I have also addressed the improvements from my previous post.
The lower saturation helps create a more mundane and gloomy atmosphere to the shots, matching with the narrative.
I had intended to film another scene lasting 30 seconds with Kieran having a dull but significant conversation with another character, to show his normal life as a business man that acts as a front against his darker, more sinister tendencies. However due to time constraints with both me and Kieran wont have time to do this. It would also add time onto my title sequence which I can't afford as I am already very close to the time limit. Mr. Earl has said my work is already at a level 4 so there is not much need for another scene.
Anyway, here is it!
I think the desaturation works. "In association with..." should have a lower-case "a". If it's "A Stanton Production" you may want to create a "Stanton" ident (since it implies that "Stanton" is the name of the production company. Failing that, it should be "An Elleah Stanton film" (if you are the director). I'm, not so sure about the camera--move at 01:30 (the shower) - it looks a little odd to me. Don't fade the music out at the end before the director credit; keep it going until that's been up. Could do with looking at the end of the track to see what it's doing...
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