00:00 - when you do your final piece, I would suggest starting with
an establishing shot 00:02 - the audio on the soundtrack is a little gnarly - sounds
slightly distorted. 00:06 - your action match looks fine to me. You might want to think
a little more about mise-en-scene, although the framing is fine in
itself 00:08 - watch out for audio glitches between shots; your audio drops
out slightly between Sam entering and Josh standing up. You've
broken (or at least bent) the 180 degree rule here - you would
expect Josh to be looking to the right since Sam exits the previous
shot from the left 00:09 - slight continuity error in terms of Josh's positioning. It's
unusual to cut between two similar shots (you've gone from,
effectively, a mls to an ms - you would expect to go to a CU or a
shot of the other character here. Again, check the audio - you need
to cover these glitches using ambient sound 00:11 - it's pleasing that you are using a range of shots. However,
you generally wouldn't keep cutting to different shots of the same
person in this way; you would expect to see, for example, a reaction
shot of the person Josh is talking to 00:12 - slight continuity error here in terms of the direction Josh
is facing between shots and the movment 00:15 - framing is slightly odd here, with Josh being slightly out
of shot. Continuity error - Sam's arm is extended, then not, so the
action match doesn't work 00:22 - continuity error in terms of the way Josh is facing: he is
looking at Sam in the previous shot, then looking at the chart in
the next one with no obvious movement between the two 00:29 - good use of close-up, although there is an action match
continuity error (the pen has been removed from the chart in one
shot but is then on "Algeria" in the next). The camera is a little
wobbly here. You hold on this a little too lonh - could do with
cutting back to Josh, possibly ELS of him and Sam? 0:46 - consider mise-en-scene: why would this scene be taking place
in a room full of music equipment? 0:50 - slight continuity errror in terms of where Sam is positioned
relative to Josh; considering the move Sam made, we would probably
expect to see him walking into the shot. The framing is also a
little odd when the camera pans; Sam is not quite in shot 0:58 - there seems to be a slight continuity error in terms of the
direction in which Sam is facing when you cut to the MS 1:03 - an action mis-match with the paper; look at where it is in
the previous shot to this one, where Sam whips it out of the folder a second time... 01:07 - a minor point, but do make sure your props look realistic... 01:08 - not keen on the zoom here; the focus goes a little out 01:16 - a rather nasty glitch here where you cut between effectively
the same shot; you need a cutaway to break these up, which would
mask the issue 01:21 - same comment as before regarding cutting between shots of
the same character - this would work better with cutting between Sam
and Josh 01:43 - the sequence here works quite well, although Sam is angled
slightly oddly; would expect him to be angled more towards the
camera. Not convinced that the move here works - it looks a little
intrusive. It does, however, allow you to demo a way of breaking the
180 rule, which you should mention, and allows you to build up the
tension a little 02:02 - I rather like the crash zoom at the end
Overall, as you can see, there are a lot of continuity issues. I
would also ask you to consider mise-en-scene and audio. However,
you've used a range of shots and there is some effective editing.
00:00 - when you do your final piece, I would suggest starting with
ReplyDeletean establishing shot
00:02 - the audio on the soundtrack is a little gnarly - sounds
slightly distorted.
00:06 - your action match looks fine to me. You might want to think
a little more about mise-en-scene, although the framing is fine in
itself
00:08 - watch out for audio glitches between shots; your audio drops
out slightly between Sam entering and Josh standing up. You've
broken (or at least bent) the 180 degree rule here - you would
expect Josh to be looking to the right since Sam exits the previous
shot from the left
00:09 - slight continuity error in terms of Josh's positioning. It's
unusual to cut between two similar shots (you've gone from,
effectively, a mls to an ms - you would expect to go to a CU or a
shot of the other character here. Again, check the audio - you need
to cover these glitches using ambient sound
00:11 - it's pleasing that you are using a range of shots. However,
you generally wouldn't keep cutting to different shots of the same
person in this way; you would expect to see, for example, a reaction
shot of the person Josh is talking to
00:12 - slight continuity error here in terms of the direction Josh
is facing between shots and the movment
00:15 - framing is slightly odd here, with Josh being slightly out
of shot. Continuity error - Sam's arm is extended, then not, so the
action match doesn't work
00:22 - continuity error in terms of the way Josh is facing: he is
looking at Sam in the previous shot, then looking at the chart in
the next one with no obvious movement between the two
00:29 - good use of close-up, although there is an action match
continuity error (the pen has been removed from the chart in one
shot but is then on "Algeria" in the next). The camera is a little
wobbly here. You hold on this a little too lonh - could do with
cutting back to Josh, possibly ELS of him and Sam?
0:46 - consider mise-en-scene: why would this scene be taking place
in a room full of music equipment?
0:50 - slight continuity errror in terms of where Sam is positioned
relative to Josh; considering the move Sam made, we would probably
expect to see him walking into the shot. The framing is also a
little odd when the camera pans; Sam is not quite in shot
0:58 - there seems to be a slight continuity error in terms of the
direction in which Sam is facing when you cut to the MS
1:03 - an action mis-match with the paper; look at where it is in
the previous shot to this one, where Sam whips it out of the folder
a second time...
01:07 - a minor point, but do make sure your props look realistic...
01:08 - not keen on the zoom here; the focus goes a little out
01:16 - a rather nasty glitch here where you cut between effectively
the same shot; you need a cutaway to break these up, which would
mask the issue
01:21 - same comment as before regarding cutting between shots of
the same character - this would work better with cutting between Sam
and Josh
01:43 - the sequence here works quite well, although Sam is angled
slightly oddly; would expect him to be angled more towards the
camera. Not convinced that the move here works - it looks a little
intrusive. It does, however, allow you to demo a way of breaking the
180 rule, which you should mention, and allows you to build up the
tension a little
02:02 - I rather like the crash zoom at the end
Overall, as you can see, there are a lot of continuity issues. I
would also ask you to consider mise-en-scene and audio. However,
you've used a range of shots and there is some effective editing.